Academic Writing
Error Detection Exercise(1)
Read the following sentences and detect any kinds of error(s), if any.
- All tries and researches for finding a drug or vaccine for AIDS expose to failure.
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- This virus killed the T cell that are the most important cells of immune system.
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- AIDS has three period.
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- The first is window period that last 6 mounts.
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- In this period, the disease don’t detected with blood test.
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- In this period the immune system fight with virus.
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- At the end of this period people may shows some symptoms such as anemia and lymphnodenopathy.
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- The third phase is the symptomatic disease that called AIDS.
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- The patient shows the symptoms of AIDS such as various cancers and infectious disease.
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- There are some ways for transmission of it.
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- The first way is sexual transmission that is the most common ways of transmission of AIDS.
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- Another way is transmission from mother to newborn.
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- The next way is the use of common device between drug addicted.
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- Africa has the most numbers of patients in the world.
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- There are many characteristics for a good doctor,for example, have many informations.
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- Next,power of identifying and communicate between his obtained and science of medicine.
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- Good doctor have marked effect in society.
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- When there are good doctor in society, count of disease is decrease in society and country.
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- When a doctor is a good doctor , people respect to him.
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- There is many difference between Iranian doctor and forign doctor.
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- whrease Iranian doctor attempt to car patient , forign doctor don’t attempt to car Iranian patient.
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- unlike forign doctor who ar in high class , forign doctor in it’s society are in middle class.
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- unlike forign doctor who have many modern instrument and tool for car of the patients, Iranian doctor have not many modern instrument and tool for car of the patients.
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- when a door is a good doctor that have many charactristics and instrument.
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- For example a doctor must be have enough information about disease.
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- He should was been a intelligent and struggler student in period of his studying.
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- Second , he should be familer to new knowledges of medicine.
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- He should study more and more magazines that include of new news of medicin.
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- The factor for a good doctor is ability of well diagnosis.
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- He should can match his mental information with his ability in diagnosis of diseas.
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- The next factor is to be connected with sick.
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- He should have a good behaiviour in contact with sick.
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- The last and the most specification of a good doctor is moral sense.
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- The good doctor must have modern hospital.
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35.First, their sould study very hard at university.
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- Second , their should research many case that related to this field.
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- As a result , their search them on the computer or in many scientific site , or study very magazine.
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- Their must be careful and consider that time is very important for them.
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- Finally , when this period of time is finished, now their tells a good doctor.
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- To me , a good doctor must be 3 factors.
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- Finally-most importanty-they don’t work for money because they must work for servicing the patient and loveing to their duty.
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